ACTION, DIALOG and DUAL-DIALOG

ACTION

• merupakan penerangan keadaan, tempat, babak, dan juga character melalui imej 

"Di dalam sesebuah lakon layar, elemen aksi ini lebih penting daripada dialog kerana sesebuah filem yang baik amat bergantung kepada kekuatan aksi yang dapat memberi pemahaman yang jelas kepada penonton dan dialog pula berperanan untuk menguatkan lagi aksi. Ini kerana filem bergerak di atas visual cerita." - Zaini Kosnin 

• ditulis/dihuraikan pada real-time (not past tense)
• tulis dgn ringkas dan jelas dalam 4-5 ayat shj (mudah utk reader scan/run through)
• gunakan huruf besar pada nama character utk pengenalan buat kali pertama

INT. LAUNDRY ROOM - MORNING

A hand turns off a radio, shutting off the morning news.A small dog with two different colored eyes sticks his head out of the dryer, where he plays with the newly-dried clothes. LYNN SEAR reaches in and pulls out a blouse. She shakes it in the air

• avoid ayat arahan (dlm skrip) utk menuju hala camera (ini tugas Director). Jika nak juga, guna 

a) perkataan dengan huruf besar; atau

Malcolm smiles. Returns his fingers to the mind-reading position. Malcolm looks to Cole's arm. Cole is wearing A LARGE SILVER WATCH. It swims on his thin wrist. It could probably slide up to his shoulder. Malcolm closes his eyes.

b) asingkan ayat dengan perenggan yg lain

Cole carefully locks the door behind him. He moves to the bottom of the stairs and looks around nervously. Anxiously.

The eight-year-old child reaches into his pocket and slips on a pair of VERY LARGE GLASSES.

• ada contoh action (shown below) yg menggunakan tanda -- which aku take sure apa function, mcmana nak guna whatsoever..

INT. KITCHEN - NIGHT

Lynn is kneeling on the kitchen floor trying to coax thepuppy out of the broom closet.

COLE (O.S.)

Momma.

Lynn turns -- surprised to hear her son's voice. Lynn'seyes are red from crying. She wipes them quickly with theback of her hand.

Mother and son look at each other. Beat.

• penggunaan "WE"/"we" dalam arahan/action yg aku rasa utk mencadangkan director hala tuju / fokus imej/skrin. This thing, aku rasa; it's more to writer's styling..

COLE'S EYES LOOK AROUND THE ROOM WARILY... WE MOVE IN ONTHEM -- TILL HIS EYES FILL THE FRAME.

Beat.

And then we see what he's staring at. Through Cole's hospital room window we see the adjacent wing of the hospital building. Rows of hospital room windows are visible. In the windows are patients... SOME OLD, SOME YOUNG... SOME ARE DRESSED IN MODERN HOSPITAL GOWNS... SOME FROM DECADES PAST. 

THEY STAND UNNATURALLY STILL IN THEIR WINDOWS... WATCHING, WAITING.

DIALOG

• merupakan butir perkataan yg perlu diucapkan oleh pelakon; samada 

• antara dua individu,

• berkata-kata kuat secara sendirian

• suara dari off-screen atau voice-over  

ANNA'S MUFFLED VOICE CARRIES DOWN THE STAIRS.

His face turns up to the ceiling.

MALCOLM

(loud)

Are you calling me?

WE HEAR ANNA'S FOOTSTEPS MOVE ACROSS THE BASEMENT CEILING. WE HEAR THE FRONT DOOR OPEN.

ANNA (O.S.)

What? You don't see enough of me at

the store?

Malcolm gets up and moves closer to their voices as he stretches his legs. 

• It's good kalau writer membaca/ucap dengan kuat dialog yg telah ditulis utk mendapatkan realistik, character ataupun mood.
• Keep change and improve sehingga lancar..
• some great dialog/line/phrase can become famous
• dari dialog, audience bole dapatkan passion and soul of the character

NELSON

Sara, stop it. Will you please

stop this, I'm not leaving you --

I know you love me.

SARA

I do, Nelson. I've never felt

anything like it. I never thought

I'd have the chance and you gave

that to me.

NELSON

Then why are you doing this?

SARA

Because it's starting to happen, 

Nelson --

NELSON

-- It doesn't --

SARA

-- If you leave now, everything

we had will stay perfect forever --

NELSON

-- Sara --

SARA

-- All we have is how you'll

remember me and I need that memory

to be strong and alive --

NELSON

-- But I want --

SARA

-- If I know I'm remembered that

way then I can face anything.

Can't you see, Nelson, you're my

immortality.

NELSON

I want to take care of you, Sara.

SARA

I'll be alright. I'm going home.

They know I'm coming. They're

ready.

(beat)

• contoh dialog di atas ada byk pengunaan -- which again, aku pun tak sure. But I think, it's kinda pause for a moment thing. Or, is it utk buat dialog ucapan sedikit berbisik??

DUAL-DIALOG

• jika ada dua character sedang berdialog secara serentak (dual-dialogue), ayat ucapan dibahagikan kepada dua bahagian (two columns) bersebelahan menunjukan ucapan secara serentak diperlukan.

• ada juga contoh format yg sedikit berlainan (lihat contoh di bawah); but still OK..